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Oh man, I could feel the heart wrenching as the poem came to an end. Great piece :)

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Thank you so much Breanna! I’ve said here before that I was considering another stanza, but it just felt right to leave it as it was. Enough seemed to be said. I appreciate you taking the time to read.

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This is so good.

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Thank you so much, Jennifer. That's so kind. I'm partiticularly glad you like this poem because it proves that restraint - which I'm guessing is really part of the essence of poetry - can be the making of a piece. What's not said is as important as what is.

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I love this!! Well done!! I think you have a wonderful understanding of your own writing(which cannot be said for everyone!) You know exactly when to say more and when to hold back!

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Thank you, Katherine! Yes, it's odd how a piece can sometimes feel forced, and other times when it feels you've said enough. Less sometimes is more. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. It really does help spur me on.

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That's profound !!!

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Priyal thank you! That's such a wonderful thing to say. I'm so glad you took something from the poem.

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This is a deeply powerful piece right here.

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Thanks, man. It felt right. And the right length. Sometimes you don't need to elaborate. It seemed just enough.

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Yes, it's perfect how it is.

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