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v.vii's avatar

a very interesting one, like I thought, the rhyme fits nicely into this one, well penned :)

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thank you so much! Especially since the structure was much more challenging than I thought when I first started out writing it!

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Rea de Miranda's avatar

Your words speak of struggle and pain, but the light is in sight. Carrying on the only option. Beautiful! 🩶🤍

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Exactly, Rea. At least, that was the main intention of the poem. In grief friends may fade and maybe you find yourself alone. So either you give into darkness or carry on despite your burden. Thank you as always for your insights and positive comments.

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Joe Nichols's avatar

What a tender portrayal of perseverance in the face of despair. You captured the quiet agony of isolation, the silent battles we often fight alone, and then you offered a sliver of hope in a sunrise. This is the kind of writing that stays with the soul. Beautiful work.

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thanks for this, Joe. Yes, in the end, we either lie down or carry on. And in that way there's always a little hope, even if the road is hard along the way. Thanks again for taking the time to comment.

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Beautiful rhyme structure in this.. couldn’t help but think of Errantry by Tolkien..

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

I wasn't aware of this Tolkein poem, Alex. So thank you for introducing it to me. I loved its sinuous structure and playful language. And it's always so flattering to be compared to great writing. Thanks for reading!

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

My pleasure! Errantry is probably one of the great poetic feats of all time..

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