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lelian's avatar

this is beautiful strung, woven words so deep

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Lelian thank you. That means a lot. I’m new to writing poetry, so positive feedback makes such a difference and is so encouraging.

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lelian's avatar

read that on my birthday it also meant alot

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thank you, Lelian.

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Prince the VIIth's avatar

Clean shot.

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Meg's avatar

Rich words! I really loved the way this poem carried itself. It felt really authentic.

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thanks Meg. I'm trying different things at the moment. Some less successful than others, but I'm glad you liked this one!

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The Drafting Dreamer's avatar

I like this. I thought the subtle shift in rhyme scheme and rhythm in verses 4 and 5 was particularly effective. Nice work

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

I appreciate that. I'm trying a few different things, and seeing where it gets me. Sometimes they come off. But I'm enjoying the experimentation. Thanks for taking the time to read!

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M. Anne Avera's avatar

I loved this! fantastic stuff

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thank you! This is one of those cases where a piece of writing began as one thing, and then revealed itself to be something else. The old analogy about the sculpture already being trapped inside the stone. Thanks again for reading.

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A.O. Homorodean's avatar

Amazing

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Little Griefs Poetry's avatar

Thanks, I appreciate that! I'm trying to post every other day if I can, but never really know if people are reading on a Sunday. So, it's a boost to know someone is taking the time out of their weekend to read & comment.

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